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As aching souls lament for wasted years
And strangers, seen as monsters carve the dark
An angel doth descend to purge theirs tears
And bless with such a blossoming remark

Too modest for a Goddess, there she stands
With eyes that dance like such a lambent flame
To empathise, and reach with outstretched hands
To those that brim with pain, with hurt, with blame

She purifies corruption with a glance
Of sympathy, that’s so ignites my life
Her mastery of words, a silken dance
A wit to match the sharpest silver knife

Perfection caged in mere mortality
To put us first, her divine policy
©2007-2009 ~autumn-cannibal
:iconautumn-cannibal:

Author's Comments

I wrote this as a tribute to you, in hopes that you would rise from the ashes with your poetry once more. Thank you for all your help

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:iconseriouslyten:
Wow. This is great. Very heart found. Must say thats brilliant
:iconj-jammer:
I do like the entire thing.

I personally love the first stanza and the last. They are well done. I like the light rhyme of mortality and policy---for my pronunciation it's light =P -- it's hard hitting like School and Cool or maybe Rule.

good job:D
:icongrime325:
wonderful Autumn-san

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Time must flow on, its better to go with it than against it.

are you serious.....just push the damn button.
:iconthoran-storyteller:
Heartfelt and meaningful. Quite wonderful.
On the subject of returning to poetry, I, too, should concentrate more on my own poetry.
Good job, my friend.

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'A picture paints a thousand words. My words paint a thousand pictures.'- A Wise Fool
:iconautumn-cannibal:
Thanks very much, the sentiment is greatly appreciated :)

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates
:iconautumn-cannibal:
Thank you for the kind words, and the more in depth analysis of my rhyming scheme, it shows a profound understanding on your part :)

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates
:iconlucydollz:
i love it!
great poem
u have a way with words that is just unbelievable!

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Life is short, do whatever you like
:iconsilverettafithran:
Very neat. I love the way you set her as a mortal caged.

The first stanza, third line. Is it supposed to theirs tears? or their tears?

Great job once again.

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If you're here to give me misery, please, take a number..
:iconautumn-cannibal:
Thank you very much :)

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates

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