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The sun bows to the sky
And sparks a rare and lurid circumstance
To summon forth the lover’s twilight dance
As lambent shadows lie

The noble gentleman
Will reach to take his doting partner’s hand
And lead forbidden tangos through the land
Their rhythmic pagan clan

And as the heavens cry
To cool the heated movements on the earth
The passion of the dance is given birth
As lambent shadows lie

The nearby saplings sway
To ancient and erotic metronomes
And in the branches creatures make their homes
In atmospheres so gay

And though day’s embers die
The dancers surge with awe induced desire
So pirouette once more around the fire
As lambent shadows lie

The heathens of the gloom
Take care to follow righteous steps of old
And follow love’s instructions as they told
Until the pending doom

Aroused, the moon shall fly
And sorrowful the twilight dance will end
But more of love's crusaders will ascend
As lambent shadows lie
©2007-2009 ~autumn-cannibal
:iconautumn-cannibal:

Author's Comments

I've had this idea swimming in my brain for about 6 months, and I finally had to to put it down on paper after trying to write it in every other form of poetry I could think of.

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:iconthoran-storyteller:
See, there's definately no harm in experimenting with structure.
I like this a lot. It's light hearted, and yet, quite beautiful.
Well done! :)

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'A picture paints a thousand words. My words paint a thousand pictures.'- A Wise Fool
:iconsmellybumlives4eva:
This is an exquisite peom. I like the variety from you other works. It's nice to see something different!!!! Very beatuifully done, I love how easily it reads. And the imagery is amazing!!!! You shouldn't be so hesitant about experimenting!!! Keep it up!! *hugs*

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"Níl aon tinteáin mar do thinteáin féin."
:iconfavoritedamndisease:
Seven stanzas, Lines 1 & 4 in each stanza being 6 syllables where lines 2 & 3 are 10 syllables each. The rhyming scheme is pristinely written. You managed this piece beautifully and I'm lovin' it!

It's good to read your work, I've missed it!

~Kris~

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People are like stained-glass windows. They sparkle and shine when the sun is out, but when the darkness sets in, their true beauty is revealed only if there is a light from within.
:iconautumn-cannibal:
Thanks very much, I wasn't really sure about this piece:)

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates
:iconautumn-cannibal:
Thanks very much, you've managed to ease my anxiety about this piece :)

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates
:iconautumn-cannibal:
I guess I have taken a break from poetry but I needed to get something written down before I exploded :) Your structural analysis is very perceptive *bows*. Thanks so much

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates
:iconautumn-cannibal:
Ta very much:)

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates
:iconinsomaniac55:
Cool structure. It's like a relaxed villanelle.
:iconautumn-cannibal:
That's what I was going for :D Well perceived. Thanks very much

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Cruciatus Animus, Pius Vates

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